Your Task. Revise the following to eliminate long lead-ins.
This is an announcement to tell you that all computer passwords must be changed every six months for security purposes.
We are sending this memo to notify everyone that anyone who wants to apply for telecommuting may submit an application immediately.
I am writing this letter to inform you that your new account executive is Edward Ho.
This is to warn you that cyber criminals use sophisticated tools to decipher passwords rapidly.
This message is to let you know that social media services can position your company at the forefront of online marketing opportunities.
Redundancies (Obj. 1)
Your Task. Revise the following to avoid redundancies.
Because his laptop was small in size, he could carry it everywhere.
A basic fundamental of computer safety is to avoid storing your password on a file in your computer because criminals will look there first.
The manager repeated again his warning that we must use strong passwords.
Although the two files seem exactly identical, we should proofread each and every page.
The computer specialist combined together a PowerPoint presentation and a handout.