The sentences below are unnecessarily wordy (WO), unnecessarily repetitious (REP), or they contain faulty parallelism (PARA), pretentious language (PL), or clichés (CL). Where necessary, tighten up those sentences which are too wordy or too repetitious, balance the faulty parallelism, substitute simpler, more effective words for the pretentious ones, or replace the trite clichés with fresh, specific words.
Please label the type of style problem each entry contains as well as rewriting the sentences so as to correct the problems.
1/ Since I am a vegetarian and eat only fruits and vegetables, the eating of meat of any sort is certainly not something which I would willingly consider doing.
2/ I do not comprehend that individual's behavior.
3/ The instant that classes let out for summer, I feel free as a bird.
4/ The July Fourth crowd showed happiness, excitement, and there was a patriotic spirit.
5/ Regardless of what I say, regardless of what I do, my father is annoyed by my words and my behavior.
6/ I walked to the store. I then bought some candy. I then walked home. I then watched some television. I ate the candy while I watched the television.
7/ I was green with envy when I learned about Elena's promotion.
8/ Fred was terminated from his employment.
9/ Eating too much fast food can be bad for one's health. Eating lots of hot dogs and hamburgers, eating lots of fries, eating lots of pizza, eating lots of fried chicken can all be especially bad for one's health.
10/ My nephew plans to become a state trooper, train as a municipal police officer, or joining the FBI.