Problem: Jeanie gazed out the window of the bus as she rode downtown along the lake. Heading to work, just like every day, she wished there were some way to make the bus ride longer. Staring out at the gray sky and water was a thousand times better than sitting in her dingy office.
1. Explain the character's motivation and identify words or phrases that reveal this
2. How might you revise this description to make the character's motivation clearer? Explain what you'd do